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OK, but could be so much better.
The writing reads like a screen play. Short, disconnected sentences, very little phraseology, no transitions, much like a 'Dick and Jane' book.
e.g.,P.s98:"Maria went up to the hall. The musicians were practicing in one corner. Sunlight streamed in through the open tops of the windows. She unpinned her cloak and gave it to a servant. Two maids cam into the hall, one carrying a baby in her arms. Maria paused, interested. "
edit: Maria quietly entered the hall where the musicians had begun practicing and the sunlight streamed in through the open transoms along with the familiar scent of the ward. Pausing, she unfastened her cloak handing it to a waiting servant as two of the castle maids, one carrying an infant, caught her interest.
Descriptions are short and shallow. Physical descriptions are cursory leaving out so much of the 'good stuff' of a novel - the stuff that makes the novel breath, live.
I am reading the book because I love to read and the title caught my imagination but this one could be so much better - or better yet would be wonderful on the screen where the audience could surmise with their eyes most of what is lacking.
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Posted February 16, 2014
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