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Posted December 18, 2011
In Mark Fitzgerald's novel, "I Could Never Hurt a Kid," the premise of a child kidnapping is explored. While I personally do not have much experience in this subject matter, I do feel like I have enough understanding to discuss the writing of this novel a little.
The idea of a child kidnapping is rife with potential emotional confrontations between all affected characters. This can be expressed through many different forms of writing.
My biggest concern with this novel was that, instead of showing any of these ways, the author simply told us what was happening, and how people felt, without truly letting the reader feel the characters' feelings.
This disconnect between the reader and the characters went on throughout the short work, too short to be called a novel at all. Furthermore, there are a significant number of grammatical and spelling errors throughout.
This story could have had a massive amount of emotional intrigue, but the author's method of telling instead of showing left a disconnect difficult to get past, and, combined with the errors, made it quite difficult to feel good about, after finishing it.
Mark, I would rewrite this to allow the characters to come to life, and get out of their heads a little bit, and this could shine. Thanks for your story.
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Posted September 24, 2011
In my defense..
I am disappointed that someone would tender such a low review, in terms of stars earned, without offering some constructive criticism. This little tale was offered for free. I am not trying to compete with Tolstoy.
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Posted September 21, 2011
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