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Posted June 14, 2014
Okay, first, she has a black that disappears, she tells him in t
Okay, first, she has a black that disappears, she tells him in their first conversation that the queen is her stepmother, her sees her back has whipped, but forgets and she tells him again in a big angsty scene revealing thr abuse, when they talked about just before. The list goes on. I can't even pretend this would be good for amateur writing, let alone something to spend money on.Was this review helpful? Yes NoThank you for your feedback. Report this reviewThank you, this review has been flagged.
THe excerpt was promising, seemed like it would be entertaining. And, for the most part, it was, at first. It would be better off in a different setting, maybe contemporary fantasy world, I don't know, but at moments the author tries to write in dialect, and then at other times, is overdone contemporary dialogue.
Don't read it. For crying out loud, don't waste your money. The author has talent, so I don't understand what happened here. Not a a lot of grammar errors, so I have to assume someone proofread it. How could they miss the continuity errors? These are big mistakes, and glaringly obvious. For crying out loud, she tells him that she is the stepdaughter to the queen, and he doesn't realize that this means...she is the stepdaughter to the queen. Really? And martyr characters are boring! Don't make her the saint, the whipping girl, and the virginal sex goddess. It is annoying, and insulting.
I couldn't finish. I rarely put a book aside, but the continuity errors are insulting. Have some pride in your work, and do a have decent job of creating a work that you can be proud of. I would be ashamed to have my name attached to this.
I don't write harsh reviews often, but while I can accept grammar errors and occasional slips in plot holes, this is outrageous. I can't believe I wasted my money on this. I am actually angry about this. Can I any more vehemently argue against reading this?