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Posted October 17, 2012
Posted August 6, 2012
This 5 page short story is a re-telling of the "ghost without a head" urban legend. Unfortunately, it was pretty bad. There are too many frivolous details, and not enough important ones.
The author does not need to repeat the same line in multiple locations across a few pages. Readers, generally speaking, are not so dumb as to need a reminder of the key plot point repeatedly over 5 pages. It is unnecessary, and makes the writer seem inexperienced. Also, it implies the reader is an imbecile with massive short term memory loss.
Spend your five minutes elsewhere.
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