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Posted July 17, 2012
Good try! This is a short story, only 27pgs. Spoiler: Mr. Ste
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This is a short story, only 27pgs.
Spoiler: Mr. Steele needs to go back & edit, alot of spelling errors. He should be clear when he is changing characters & switching scenes. He contradicts himself. At first you think the maid is great, the old man seems to like her, says he likes her, & that he doesn't have time to adress her stealing since she is only taking small items. Then at the end it gets really confusing, he has set her up for his murder which really isn't a murder since he has asked her to help him kill himself. We get a brief glimpse of the maid, she's a thief & she is gonna buy him the items to kill himself but not sure how that makes her a cold-blooded killer. Mr. Steele has a great idea, turning the tables on a villain, but he needs to re-work this story & straighten out the contradictions.
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