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Posted January 26, 2013
Very poorly written
I'm sorry to say that this novel is so poorly written that it is simply unreadable. It sounds like a wonderful plot but this author needs a good editor. There are run-on sentences that take up entire pages so that you have to re-read the page to discern the meaning. There are commas where none belong and no commas where they are desperately needed. This author has underestimated the value of editing; that, or the people who pre-read the book are pandering to the author. My advice to the author.........keep writing but take a class on sentence structure and grammar.
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Posted February 11, 2013
The concept is good but the writing is bad. The run on sentences just make the stiry unreadable. This story needs serious editing!Was this review helpful? Yes NoThank you for your feedback. Report this reviewThank you, this review has been flagged.
Also, excessive personal descriptions of characters including adding something after the fact, really bogged down the story.
I gave up after 80-some pages. Just too hard to track the storyline.