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Posted April 6, 2013
Too jumbled and unorganized. Very amatuer
Book starts in what seems like the middle and goes from there. You discover things as the characters do,kinda, and then it devolps awkwardsly and slowly. She introducles a lot of characters in a small time frame and mashes them together, not to mention their "races". It gets confusing when she alternates between narrating, her internal dialogue, her convo with her friend in her head and the internal dialigue of the other main character as its not broken down and again unorganized and jumbeled. The story takes forever to get there with silly scenes that dont give u a clue as to why or what the main goal is and the "love story" that is sprinkled in seems unnatural and forced. Overall it seems amatuerish. Perhaps if this was the second in the series it wouldnt seem as aweful but as this story fails to build upon itself, it needs a better foundation.Was this review helpful? Yes NoThank you for your feedback. Report this reviewThank you, this review has been flagged.
Posted February 18, 2013