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Lots of beginning writer mistakes here. Mixed tenses, characters repeating each others' names. Spelling and punctuation mistakes. Lots of specialized words dealing with the fetish/fantasy ("V-girl"). I was interested to see links to songs on YouTube embedded in the text. Too many dropped names & red herrings for such a short work (the whole cologne scene could have been deleted). For a whole story about "Big Girl Love" there was not enough description of Kelly's body. Once the clothes were off (last 3 pages), everything was about genitalia. Editing and proofreading are a must!
10 out of 11 people found this review helpful.
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Posted January 11, 2011
This is perhaps the cheesiest, worst story I have read in a very long time! The dialog is ridiculous--no one would ever really say or do the things these characters do...and not in a good way! I enjoy fun, sexy erotic stories, but this was such a waste. I wish I could give it less than one star; it's not even worth the free download!
7 out of 12 people found this review helpful.
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Posted December 4, 2010
Very hot sexy story. Only bad thing about it? Too darn short!
2 out of 3 people found this review helpful.
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Posted April 13, 2012
Typical less imaginitive. I award you no points and my God have mercy on your soul lol..... billy madison quote
1 out of 1 people found this review helpful.
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Posted December 27, 2011
Hot very hot
1 out of 1 people found this review helpful.
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Posted December 27, 2011
Way too short to care about the characters, even a little
Just felt rushed
1 out of 1 people found this review helpful.
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Posted November 22, 2011
This booj was excitingto read like it being out the word that u can find stuff and potiential in big girls as well not all skinny girls have wat a man needs so............
1 out of 1 people found this review helpful.
Was this review helpful? Yes NoThank you for your feedback. Report this reviewThank you, this review has been flagged.Best part about the book is the model on the cover! Story had a lot of promise but the authors constant mix up of current, past and future tense drove me crazy.
1 out of 1 people found this review helpful.
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Posted June 21, 2011
I enjoyed thiis book very much the author was very detailed. I will be looking for more of her books.
1 out of 2 people found this review helpful.
Was this review helpful? Yes NoThank you for your feedback. Report this reviewThank you, this review has been flagged.I felt like rolling my eyes every line I read. It was so cheesy. The relationship was ridiculously typical love [lust] at first sight. The main female sounded pretty trashy and eager to sleep with anything with two legs.
This wasn't even worth downloading for a laugh. A total waste of time, even if it is free.
1 out of 1 people found this review helpful.
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Posted January 11, 2010
it was a nice guick read..
1 out of 2 people found this review helpful.
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Posted December 30, 2009
As someone that loves voluptuous women I love this short story looking forward to reading more about them I am willing to pay for the noval.
Thank you
1 out of 1 people found this review helpful.
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Posted May 22, 2012
I can still imagine her I 'm a straight girl and she turned me on well written I like that she was soft and a dirty girl at the same time. Yum!
Was this review helpful? Yes NoThank you for your feedback. Report this reviewThank you, this review has been flagged.It was worth reading I think they could have made a longer book out of this story.
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Posted May 8, 2012
Hi everyone! From what people said I do agree. It sounds like it does suck! I heart Adam D!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
0 out of 1 people found this review helpful.
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Posted May 7, 2012
Shame on you! How can you review without reading.???!! People like you make me sick! Read before insulting author!! Shame on you!!!!
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Posted April 28, 2012
I have not read the book. I have read the reviews so it doesnt sound like it is worth it. I am a big girl. I like that they had tried to write a story about big girls being sexy and that we can cause arousal in men. Notice i said tried. From what i read the auther needs to go back to school and learn basic writing skills. But other than that the author had the right idea. But come on. 8th graders can write better.
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Posted March 22, 2012
GEZZZZ no one isgonna do it with ya. And u shoulnt give away ur number like that. For ur own safty but i guess ppl these days would care less. The rate was just on the below girls comment. Not sure of ghe book havent read it myself
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Posted March 3, 2012
In short it was a noce story line, but however I do think the Author should have extended it more, sometimes it not the words that are said that makes a story, but the words not said.
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Posted February 26, 2012
First off a 6'1 size 14/16 is not big by any stretch of the imagination. You might ask how i know this? Well she states on page 18 she is 6'1 and on the previous page he said she is wearing a Chanel dress. And anyone who knows anything about Chanel knows they only go up to a size 14/16 but they run small so it fits like a 12/14. I stopped reading here. Not even worth the free read.
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Overview
I had no idea how exciting or sensual a voluptuous woman could be until I met Kelly. Everything about her is nothing like I was expecting. Her soft round breast, sleek curvy hips and large warm thighs, sent me on a sensual journey of passion like no other woman I’ve ever been with. WARNING: EXPLICIT SEXUAL CONTENT! ADULTS ONLY You must be 18 years of age to view and/or read the contents.