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Posted August 6, 2012
Posted July 2, 2014
Not a bad story on the whole but the writing needed some polishing, and some serious proofreading.
A lot of women look "spent" and older than their years. The "spent blonde" a "spent brunette"
Everywhere "smells stale"
"Smears by" is a term I really liked the first time I read it, but after several repetitions, it really wasn't as impressive a descriptive as it was the first time.
"Something tells me ..." Four times in two pages
Why is it so confusing to comprehend the difference between tales and tails, between role and roll, between brass tacks and brass tax?
Posted March 7, 2013
Posted September 25, 2012
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