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Posted June 2, 2012
Modern slang seeps into the writing and distracts you from the story. "Nips them in the rears", could have said, " attack from behind and block their escape". Using language of the era helps contintue the mood the writer has created, thus making the story flow.
The story is interesting and there are multiple plots intertwined giving the reader intrigue. I think with another editing this would be an excellent book.