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Posted November 1, 2012
I think your idea is a very good one, but the chapters are a bit confusing and there are some things I hope are revealed in a later chapter. For example, how did she speak cat? I wish I could speak cat!! It's a bit rushed, but the plot is very intriging. I hope you continue. I'm writing a story at "old woods" all results. I hope this review helped. ~ L&KWas this review helpful? Yes NoThank you for your feedback. Report this reviewThank you, this review has been flagged.
Posted September 3, 2012
Posted August 24, 2012
I walked down the stairs with Bobby's leash. While Poppy got to ride Ricky I had to walk Bobby to the stables and back. It was two days after I found Bouncefire in my room and let him stay there. I know I was suspossed to get rid of the cats that night but I didn't. Mom had been really upset that I did not get rid of them that night that she told me I couldn't read any WARRIORS book for a six months. Lucky for me she didn't say any ERIN HUNTER books. I have all the SEEKERS and the first SURVIVORS. I wish the ERIN HUNTERS could make a book about horse herds. I knew they were thinking about writing about dolphins then they decided to write SEEKERS. My sister is a SEEKERS girl. She has read all of them over and over again. Poppy has read all the WARRIORS books and the first SURVIVORS book too. I walked Bobby to the stables and back. There is not anything interesting I could discrive, so yeah, it's boring out here. I went inside and unhooked Bobby from the leash and took off his collar. He sprinted to his water bowl to drink. Mom was in the shower so I snuck some cat food and poured it in a bowl. I krept upstairs to my room without dropping any. When I was inside I placed the cat food at the corner of my bed. Four cats leaped out. I almost schreeched but calmed my self. Bouncefire was one of them. "Theese are some of my clan mates",he explained. He flicked his tail at a striking black she cat ans said,"Ebonyclaw." Nodded to a silver tabby she cat with green eyes. "Echosong." He flicked his tail again at a small white she cat. "Tinycloud", I said. Bouncefire nodded. Tinycloud looked thoughtfully at the cat food. "Are those rabbit droppings",Ebonyclaw asked her voice full f distrust. "No it isn't",I said. I forgot if Ebonyclaw was a kittypet or a loner. Echosong ate some of the food gratefully. Bouncefire stayed on the bed or what he calls the big sproingy two leg thingy. I watched the cats eat hungrily. "Thirsty anyone",I aked. They all nodded. I ent downstairs to the kitchen a poured water from the sink and brought it back up in a bowl. I left them to eat in peace and read a book happily. I read SEEKERS in the first series called FIRE IN THE SKY. I glanced up every few times to check on the cats and they were doing fine when they were done they laid on my bed and napped. I smiled sweetly. They looked so cute! I sat on my bed and stroked Bouncefire's golden pelt. He purred. I smiled even wider. I could sit down and relax finally. I looked at the cieling with all the dog pictures. The walls were so covered in horse posters small and big it looked like I spent my whole life doing that when I really have been doing this only for three years. I knew my cat posters were outside on the wall outside my door. I looked at my book shelves. I sighed. My mom walked upstairs. The cats all hid. "Noala, its breakfast and why does your romm smell so stinky of cats",Mom asked. I gulped. Uh oh! I hae been latting Bouncefire make dirt in my room and it was everywhere except near my bed and doorway. My mom looked suspicious now. I did not want to give the cats away. My mom stared at me for a few moments and then left. I stared at the dirt all aroumd my room. I sighed and I decided I'll buy a litter box tomorrow if Mom lets me. Right now I was really worried and couldn't think straight. I hurried downstairs to see the whole of Skyclan in the kitchen and Mom trying to shoo them away with a broom. I didn't know better to do anything else but scream.Was this review helpful? Yes NoThank you for your feedback. Report this reviewThank you, this review has been flagged.