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Posted July 31, 2011
Upon further reading about the author it is discovered that she is a high school student. With that said I'm not going to rip her story to shreds. But I will offer my opinion. For a high school student this is a good story. Not great, but good. The characters are all very one dementional and underdeveloped. The story doesn't really flow well and the action seems rushed and unrealistic. With that said, it's a good plot line that could benifit from a little more experience, both as a writer and in life in general. Perhaps some research on relationships could benifit. I would like to see this story grow into something more than what it is now. I see potential for this story and it's author. For a free download it's worth the time.
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Posted May 4, 2012
Quick read good story.
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Posted March 26, 2012
I wanted more when the story ended
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Posted February 12, 2012
I wish there was more. Would love to know what happens on monday!
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Posted February 10, 2012
Y U NO LONGER? U SO GOOD.
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Posted January 25, 2012
Its was so sad and cute i almost cried, im gonna probly re-read this like a gazillion more time
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Posted January 2, 2012
It was cute and made me smile. Really short. I wish it continued where it let off.
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Posted December 20, 2011
Okay for a free short story by a high school author
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Overview
Jay is a closet case gay; captain of the football team, honor roll student, all the good stuff. He was doing a good job at hiding the truth until the new kid Adam appeared and turned his life upside down.