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Posted October 30, 2013
This short story is 18 pages long. It was written by a young man about 13 - 14 years old. He dedicated the book to a friend who died of cancer. I teach a writting / English class for young people. I have a problem with my typing skills, but I can edit like nobody's business. This short story has all the elements a short story, or any story should have. It was imaginative, had a good opening, middle and conclusion. There was suspense and a dab of humor. There was a good fundamental grasp of basic sentence abd paragraph structure. He story has a nice flow. I admire his gumption on publishing a story on B&N and being willing to face the sometimes cruel comments made by adults, who can not write a single sentence properly and without misspellings. If I were giving this a grade, I would give it a B. The author needs to work on his past, present and future tenses. Sometimes he gets them messed up in the same sentence. He also needs to punctuate better. A few more details would help clarify and define the subject. Overall, he did a very good job, considering his age and experience. I am very, very proud of his effort and he should be also.
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Posted October 6, 2013
Posted September 16, 2013
Posted May 19, 2013
DID NOT LIKE THIS BOOK AT ALL. HAS POTENTIAL IF CONTENT EITED. ALSO NEEDS TO LEARN SENTENCE STRUCTURE. THEY RAN ON FOREVER. REALLY HAD TO FORCE MYSELF TO FINISH IT. SORRY
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Posted June 5, 2013
Posted May 1, 2013
Short, only 18 pages, but I liked this book. Although you could tell that it was not written by an adult, I enjoyed it and caught myself smiling at some of the detail in the book. This young man definitely has a career ahead of him in writing. Keep at it.Was this review helpful? Yes NoThank you for your feedback. Report this reviewThank you, this review has been flagged.
Posted April 8, 2013