Amateur story, below average craftmanship. Only worth the price because it's free.
I find it difficult to understand how this book could have gotten so many positive reviews. The premise is good, I'll give it that much, but the story itself is only passable, and the character developement is impossibly weak and difficult to believe. If it were a 15-year-old author submitting the book as a writing assignement, I'd say he had potential; but professional, commercial level writing, this is not. If I had to venture a guess, I'd say the author was encouraged by too many people that told him his writing was great, without giving him any real and honest criticism.
First off, it's written in a very quirky present-tense form, which constantly pulled my attention away from the story and pointed it at the writing style. Second, it was way too expository ... the author was continually explaining how the characters felt, and why they felt that way instead of simply telling the story and letting the reader figure such details out themselves. In the same vein, many of the story elements were simply unecessary, as if it were a grade-school lesson, not a novel.
The main character is horribly one-dimensional; thrust into a world of magic, after going to lengths to show us how he is too shy to even ask a girl for a date, he competently and calmly starts using his new magic, and acting the hero in every situation. Realistically, a person of the temperment and personality type originally protrayed would have curled up in a ball and gone catatonic. At the very least, he should have gone through some agonizing forced growth. But no, all the agonizing is on the readers side as he glibly begins slaying evil-doers without missing a step. He runs off on a quest that is unclear and unguided, and he has no compelling reason to do so beyond a gut feeling he ought to. He is competent and confident, and has no basis to be that way whatsoever. Om top of it all, he is condescending to his companions, as if they were the strangers, and he the experienced native.
I'm sure the story worked well as a D&D campaign. As a novel, I think it fails utterly. I also think it is a shame the work was ever published in this state ... with some proper coaching, it's possible the author could have greatly improved his craft and actually produced something worth reading. But this book is not that, and the fact is has been published will only encourage him to produce more tripe in the same vein.
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