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Posted November 13, 2013
Ok if this writer needs to use bad language all the time could they please not use the same words every two pages?
That was kind of ridiclous.I mean if i was writing a book i wouldn't use language unless i absolutly had to....
Regular words can mean just as much as swear words
Anyway the timeline was sloppy i almost couldn't catch up.
I mean you can have one of the charcters be turned into a vamp in the 21st century then say he was made a vamp in the Victroian times. That was a absolute no,no.
It was better toward the end of the book .. it felt like the writer finally knew where they were going with the story.
I would definetly not recommend reading this to anybody.
Im a fan of vampires but this book made them look like something a kid would throw up after thanksgiving.
Anyway i kept the one extra star for this writer because tthey were good at descriptiveness
note to the writer : whatever you're good at make sure you take advantage of it, but don't use it overwhelmingly.
Posted September 19, 2013
Posted August 19, 2013
It would have been better if the authors didn't try to impress the reader by using big words where none were needed. The following are examples: "consume our confections" they went for milkshakes; "Miss! Please refrain from physical contact"; "I'm overdue"; "recriminatory stares"; "oblique pathway"; etc. It seems the authors were trying too hard to impress. The story would have been better without the thesaurus.Was this review helpful? Yes NoThank you for your feedback. Report this reviewThank you, this review has been flagged.