As the Great War gathers pace, Agnes and her sister Edith revel in their new-found independence and prosperity as Barnbow lasses. Not only does their danger money buy them a new life of confidence, men, work and politics but the thrill of a new future, full of fun, friendship and freedom.
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About the Author
Alice Nutter was formerly a member of the anarchist pop band Chumbawamba before hanging the mic up at the end of 2004 to concentrate on writing drama. While a member of the band Alice had a stint as a journalist and Features Editor at the now defunct Leeds Other Paper/Northern Star.
Originally from Burnley, Alice now lives in Leeds and describes herself as a writer who ended up in a band. In recent years Alice has written extensively for television, including an episode of Jimmy McGovern’s Emmy Award-Winning Accused, which was nominated for a Writers’ Guild Best Television Drama Series Award in 2011. She has also undertaken an attachment with The National Theatre Studio and is currently working on a series about The Pendle Witches for Touchpaper/BBC2.
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Barnbow Canaries based on 0 ratings. 2 reviews.
I dont know how old you are. But just some pointers on your grammar/word choices. Im not sure who your intended audience are, but as someone being older, your story is cool but the word choices seem repetetive. So look at a thesaurus to look up different word choices. As an author myself, I can tell you that thesauruses are very helpful. Because using different word choices makes your story or character seem smarter. And it honestly helps with the flow. Again your talent at being able to create vivid imagery is astonishing, and especially your attention to detail. Just minor things such as word choices (also known as diction) helps make your writing have more wit and also proffesionalism. But great 2nd chapter, ive read all your chapters so far:)
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