Crafting Short Screenplays That Connect

Crafting Short Screenplays That Connect

by Claudia H. Johnson

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ISBN-13: 9781136051296
Publisher: Taylor & Francis
Publication date: 09/10/2012
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Pages: 312
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About the Author

Florida State University Screenwriter in Residence Claudia Hunter Johnson, Ph.D. has written numerous screenplays for feature film and television productions, including two documentary specials commissioned by the National Endowment for the Arts. Her last screenplay, Obscenity (co-written with Matt Stevens), was a finalist for the 1997 Sundance Screenwriters Lab. She has written several award-winning full-length and one-act plays. Her many awards include the Lorraine Hansberry Award, American National Theatre West Award, and Academy Award. In 1993, she won the inaugural PEN/Newman's Own First Amendment Award for her campaign to restore banned literary classics to high school classrooms in Florida. Her widely acclaimed book, Stifled Laughter: One Woman's Story About Fighting Censorship, was nominated for the Pulitzer Prize.

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By Claudia Hunter Johnson

Focal Press

Copyright © 2010 Claudia H. Johnson
All right reserved.

ISBN: 978-0-08-095924-5

Chapter One



A screenwriter's purpose is to connect.

"Only connect," E. M. Forster tells us in Howard's End. He meant it as a rule to live by. I see it as a rule to write by. The best screenplays—long or short—are written by those who know how to connect—to themselves (their unique vision, material, process), to what drama is, and, most important, to others.

"You must never forget the umbilical cord is to real life, real people," Oliver Stone says in Linda Seger and Edward Jay Whetmore's From Script to Screen.

"I think of the medium as a people-to-people medium," Frank Capra says in Eric Sherman's Directing the Film, "not cameraman-to-people, not directors-to-people, not writers-to-people, but people-to-people."

"You know," Jean Renoir agrees, "if art doesn't take us as collaborators, art is dull. We must be in communion, the artist and the public. Without the collaboration of the public, to me, we have nothing."

Only connect. Write it down on a Post-it® note or a three-by-five card and stick it on your computer, desk, forehead. This deceptively simple advice is the heart of the art of writing good screenplays.

It is also the impulse to write. "When talented people write well," Robert McKee says in Story, "it is generally for this reason: They're moved by a desire to touch the audience."

Thomas Jackson described this desire when I asked how he came up with Slow Dancin' Down the Aisles of the Quickcheck:

I was driving back [from Bainbridge, Georgia, to Tallahassee] and I was thinking about a character, a grocery store manager who had a crush on his head cashier. You know, when I worked in this grocery store I had crushes on all the cashiers, you know, in some way or another, because I was very shy and I didn't speak to them so I always had crushes on them. But I was thinking about this guy and I was thinking that, because I'm a songwriter, too, what if he played ... I could just see this guy playing this woman a song, and it's not something that he normally does, and it's like he's pouring his heart out and it's just so un-him. And I'm describing this into a little tape recorder I keep with me all the time, and I got choked up. You can hear me get choked up on the tape because I'm getting emotional about this. And I say on the tape, I said, "Man, if I can just make people have that feeling, I'd feel like I did something." I thought, If I can get people to feel that way, I would feel like I did something.

You may have a different purpose in mind. If you're anything like the ambitious students I teach, you may well want to write the script for that short film that will open Hollywood's doors. And that can certainly happen, but it won't happen unless your screenplay connects. Connecting with others is what you must do to succeed as a screenwriter, and it will also be your greatest success.

Ask any dramatist—playwright or screenwriter. They'll describe the sheer wonder—and joy—of seeing an audience connecting to a story they've written. People lurching with laughter (in the right places) or staring rapt at the screen because they're so moved by the story they're seeing. And the worst times are those when an audience doesn't connect. Groans. Sighs of impatience or boredom. Bad laughs.

Years ago, during the intermission of one of my plays, I overheard two young men in the lobby discussing a dog. I like dog stories, so I sidled over to listen. The "dog," I found out, was my play. That's what is so terrifying about writing plays or screenplays: Failure is so damn public.

Okay, you've been warned.

But even an evening of My Play as a Dog cannot cancel the incomparable pleasures I've had connecting to others, seeing an audience—to my everlasting joy and amazement—stand up and cheer for a short play I wrote. And, yes, that play opened doors—terrific reviews ("offers hope for humanity"), my first agent, and publication—but I promise you nothing—nothing—equaled the sense of achievement I felt when that play connected to others. When I keep that in mind, I'm a much better writer. Maybe that's why Fritz Lang says:

I asked myself—why is the first work of a writer or a screenwriter, or of a playwright almost always a success? Because he still belongs to an audience. The more he goes away from the audience, the more he loses contact, and what I tried to do my whole life long was I tried not to lose contact with the audience.

But even Fritz Lang—for all his magnificent films such as Metropolis, M, The Big Heat—wasn't always successful.

Why? Because connecting to others is one of the hardest things that we do. As Bruno Bettelheim observed in his book Surviving, human beings are like porcupines trying to stay warm on a cold winter night: We want to be close to one another for warmth, but we don't want to be too close for comfort. We're distinct—and we're not. We want to remain distinct, unique—and we don't.

Imagine a screening room full of strangers waiting to see the short film you've written—young, old, male, female, different ages, professions—a bag boy, a film buff, a periodontist who's had a bad day, an attorney who's just realized she hates practicing law. Put yourself in their place; this shouldn't be hard; you've been an audience member longer than you've been a writer. Like you and everyone else on this planet, they're preoccupied. Yet, somehow, the story you've written must engage—catch and hold—their attention. If it doesn't, they'll think, "So what? Why are you telling me this? Wasting my time? What the hell does this have to do with my life?" They'll daydream or rattle cellophane wrappers or get up and walk out.

"The first business of the playwright is to keep the audience from walking out," William Gibson says in Shakespeare's Game. This goes for screenwriters, too.

Luckily, audiences want to connect, though this desire may be unconscious, buried. "It is true that America is a high-tech, speed-driven, 'Gimme-the-fax/facts-and-get-on-with-it' society," Marylou Awiakta says in Selu. "Few can escape this dynamic. But it's also true that most of us, deep down, yearn for relationship, connection, and meaning."

Good stories satisfy this deep yearning. Once upon a time, we shared stories around a fire—sometimes we still do—but now we usually share them in movie theaters, and the flickering light on our faces comes from the images up on the screen. The stories we see may take place in a galaxy far away, on a sheep farm in New Zealand, in a depressed Sheffield, England, in post-WWII Germany, or in the slums of India. The heroine or hero may be a rebel fighter or a gallant pig or an English steelworker or a Nazi guard or an Indian orphan, but stories like Star Wars, Babe, The Full Monty, The Reader, and Slumdog Millionaire (just to name a few) not only entertain us, they make us more human. They show us in fresh and wonderful ways that we're not the only fools on the planet struggling with this godawful difficult business of being alive. They "induce a moment of grace, a communion," Lewis Hyde says in The Gift, "a period during which we too know the hidden coherence of our being and feel the fullness of our lives."

As audience members, we spend a good deal of time and money in this culture to feel that sense of communion, to be fully engaged, to feel so tied to a story we're carried away.

"I want to be transported by the screenplay," actor Peter Strauss says in From Script to Screen, "to go to the movie, to be in the dark and have magic happen."

I think it helps us as writers—I know it helps me—to think of a screenplay as a magic carpet ride, to ask these questions: "How does my story lift an audience off the ground? Take them on a journey? Return them to their seats?" And, perhaps most important, "How does the ride make them feel?"

"I look for passion, aliveness, hatred, rage, fear, pain, joy, bigness," Strauss continues. "I want to feel big, I want to be angry big, feel sad big."

Look at the language he's using: I want to feel big. I want to be angry big, feel sad big. He isn't content to see characters having emotions—he wants to feel those emotions himself.

The late great Paddy Chayefsky (Marty, The Hospital) put it bluntly, "Drama is concerned only with emotion." And, in interview after interview, even Tarantino insists that a story must work on an emotional level. "A play"—or, in this case, a screenplay—"is the shortest distance from emotions to emotions," George Pierce Baker says in Dramatic Technique.

The stories we tell must create shared emotions, those golden threads that connect the audience to the characters up on the screen. Or on paper.

When Alan Arkin came to Tallahassee to direct a short film, I asked what he looked for in a screenplay. "I just want a good story," he said. "I want to be moved."

I just want a good story.

"You can't involve them with gimmicks, with sunsets, with hand-held cameras, zoom shots, or anything else," Frank Capra says in Directing the Film. "They couldn't care less about those things. But you can give them something to worry about, some person they can worry about, and care about, and you've got them, you've got them involved." Involved. Engaged. Connected.

At the 59th Annual Academy Awards in 1987, accepting the Thalberg Award for his contributions to the industry, Steven Spielberg admitted he was more culpable than any other director for the popular practice of supplanting story with the camera and special effects. He pledged to inculcate in the next generation a greater interest in writing and to develop that interest himself.

It was this realization, this rededication to story, that led Spielberg back to that same stage to receive an Oscar for a film that connected to audiences worldwide with its wrenching disconnections and one of history's most improbable connections—Oskar Schindler caring for those on his list.


Joan Didion once said that the reason we write resides in the very vowel sounds of the phrase "Why I Write": I, I, I.

It has also been said that the reason audiences go to see what we've written can be summed up in the phrase: Tell me about me.

It's a miracle shared emotions happen at all. Still, it's true: We go to The Full Monty to see a story about unemployed steelworkers who save relationships and self-respect with a strip-show. We also go because, on some level, we want to see our own life, but we don't want to see our own life up there on the screen because we've seen it already, and that would be boring. We want to see our own life—and we don't.


This seemingly contradictory statement is nonetheless true: a paradox. The Screenplay Paradox, I like to call it, though it's true for all stories. So the screenwriter's job—the great sleight of hand—is to create a story that satisfies both.


The burning question is how?

There's no formula, gimmick. If there were, Disney would probably own the rights to it. And the answer doesn't lie in cheap hooks, manipulation, second guessing, or pandering to what an audience likes.

Because nobody knows.

"Nobody knows anything," William Goldman says about Hollywood.

"By God," John Huston says in Directing the Film, "I don't know what my best friend or wife or son or daughter would like. I only know what I like, and I hope that there are enough like me to feel the way I do about it."

Why some stories connect and others do not is, ultimately, a mystery, but we move closer to the solution when we think about what stories that do connect have in common.

A few years ago, presenting the Academy Award for the best film in a foreign language, Jeremy Irons said, "Though our language may be different, our desires, our needs, are the same."


Excerpted from CRAFTING SHORT SCREENPLAYS THAT CONNECT by Claudia Hunter Johnson Copyright © 2010 by Claudia H. Johnson. Excerpted by permission of Focal Press. All rights reserved. No part of this excerpt may be reproduced or reprinted without permission in writing from the publisher.
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Table of Contents

Introduction: The Power and Importance of Human Connection
Part I: Preparing to Write the Short Screenplay
Chapter 1: Connecting to Purpose
Only Connect
The Screenplay Paradox
Chapter 2: Connecting to Self
Le Menu
Depart the Donnee
Chapter 3: Connecting to Process
The Space-Time Conundrum
Method in Your Madness
Creating Rituals
Taking Care of Yourself
Just Do It
Chapter 4: Connecting to Screenplays
Surface and Deep Action
Making Change
The Mood Exersize
The Pearl in the Oyster
Emotional Flow
Everything You Need to Know You Can Learn From City Lights
Demystifying Format
Chapter 5: Connecting to Collaboration
Top Ten Reasons to Write With a Partner
Finding the Right Writing Partner
The Space-Time Conundrum
Co-Drafting the Script
Dealing With Disagreements
Part II: Five (Not So) Easy Screenplays
Chapter 6: The Discovery
The First Screenplay - The Discovery
Developing Character
Developing Story and Structure
Drafting the Screenplay
Rewriting the Screenplay
Chapter 7: The Decision
The Second Screenplay - The Decision
Choosing an Idea
Developing Character
Developing Story and Structure
Drafting the Screenplay
Rewriting the Screenplay
Chapter 8: The Boxing Match
The Third Screenplay - The Boxing Match
Choosing an Idea
Developing Character
Developing Story and Structure
Drafting the Screenplay
Rewriting the Screenplay
Chapter 9: The Improbable Connection
The Fourth Screenplay - The Improbable Connection
Choosing an Idea
Developing Character
Developing Story and Structure
Drafting the Screenplay
Rewriting the Screenplay
Chapter 10: The Long Short Screenplay
The Fifth Screenplay - The Long Short Screenplay
Choosing an Idea
Developing Character
Developing Story and Structure
Drafting the Screenplay
Rewriting the Screenplay
Part III: Seven Screenplays that Make it Look Easy
Chapter 11: Kosher (by Aimee Barth)
Chapter 12: My Josephine (by Barry Jenkins)
Chapter 13: A Work in Progress (by Wes Ball)
Chapter 14: Lena's Spaghetti (by Rachel Witenstein)
Chapter 15: Cool Breeze and Buzz (by Lani Sciandra)
Chapter 16: The Making of "Killer Kite" (story
Matt Stevens, screenplay by Robert S. Gray)
Chapter 17: Slow Dancin' Down the Aisles of the
Quickcheck (by Thomas Wade Jackson)
Chapter 18: Conclusion
Appendix A: Available Screenwriting Software
Appendix B: Films Referenced
Appendix C: Further Reading

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